雅思写作需要更多措施防止犯罪

　　观点类大作文犯罪类话题

　　Many people are afraid of leaving house because of crime. Some think more action should be taken to prevent crime, but others think little can be done. What is your view?(题目来源：2015年9月3日大陆雅思大作文)

　　题目大意

　　很多人因为犯罪害怕出门。一些人认为应该采取更多的措施来阻止犯罪，然而其他人认为犯罪无法阻止。问你的观点。

　　写作思路

　　这道题目是一道犯罪类话题的题目。犯罪类话题是雅思考试的高频题目，基本上每年必考个四五次。这道题目出题的角度有点怪，说的是害怕出门。当然了，作为生活在天朝的子民来说，这种话有点可笑，但是好在只是背景，不是问题本身。问题是能否有措施有效地阻止犯罪。个人认为当然是可以的。如果我们啥都不做，犯罪只会越来越多。文章就从几个方面入手介绍犯罪阻止的方法，所以这道题目其实是一道罗列观点型题目。

　　审题，找出敏感词/限定词

　　Action，限定词，measure等

　　Prevent，限定词，deter，cease，halt等

　　高分范文

　　An ongoing topic of debate in traffic safety world has been whether the age for driving should be raised or not. Typically, the legal age to drive alone needs to be 17 or so, but there is a proposal, underpinned by some groups.

　　It is fairly hard to imagine that home has become the only place of safety in modern society, where residents are worried about various kinds of crimes, street robbery, car theft and even shooting. This is obligation of the government to protect the civil life and work, which, I think, could be classified into three aspects.

　　First, deterring potential crimes is considered as a direct way to improve living environment for residents. Some strict laws and regulations should be imposed on specific crime cases. For example, prolonging the term of imprisonment could be an effective way to deter crimes, like theft and robbery. Also, lowering the minimum crime age on punishment is another solution to ordinary crimes because younger criminals are liable to escape from punishments.

　　Second, the high rate of crimes is derived partly from the widening gap of living in cities. Therefore, creating more job opportunities after investing in manufactures and public services could, to some degree, bring about stable incomes. Reduction in the number of the homeless and unemployed contributes to decline in the level of social chaos and conflicts. When everyone is satisfied with the company they work for and the salary they are paid, there may be no need for them to risk committing crimes.

　　Third, popularity of primary and secondary education or opening more technical schools is an urgent task. People who live in slums with minimum education more probably commit crimes than those with decent education and comparatively higher social status. Therefore, the level of education reflects living condition and public security in communities, which for a long term is regarded as the foundation of civilized society.

　　In conclusion, there are plenty of solutions to crimes and social problems, which depend on effectiveness of activities and continuous efforts from both government and individuals.

　　相关词汇

　　Street robbery街道抢劫

　　Car theft 偷车

　　Obligation责任

　　Classify分类

　　Deter震慑

　　Be imposed on强加于

　　Prolong延长

　　Imprisonment关监狱

　　Be liable to 易于做某事

　　Be derived from 由 而产生

　　Social chaos社会混乱

　　Conflict冲突

　　Slum贫民窟

　　Decent体面的

　　Comparatively相对而言地

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