雅思复考已经有一段时间了,参加考试或者看过考试回忆的烤鸭们都发现了雅思写作考试的一个现象:写作题库一直在循环使用,也就是说,会经常遇到剑桥真题原题。
在考场上遇到原题,但是发现自己还是无从下手的时候,相信你已经在心里痛骂自己无数遍了。
要想写好作文,了解什么才是好的雅思作文,分析剑桥真题范文必不可少。
所谓知己知彼,百战百胜,剑桥真题集合了大量考官和不同分数段的考生作文,是我们了解雅思写作及其评分特点的最好材料之一。但是剑桥真题该如何利用,很多学生却并不了解。
如果你看完考官范文之后一脸鄙夷,觉得辞藻简单;或者记完几个生词之后,就把教材合上了,再也不看了......
那么,你的雅思写作之路注定是漫长无比。
今天,我就用C9T3大作文考官范文并结合写作评分标准,和大家分享该如何最大化的利用剑桥范文。
C9T3作文题目
Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
题目译文:一些人认为增加运动设施是改善大众健康的最好方法,但另一些人认为这个方法没啥用,应该采取其他的方法。讨论双方并给出自己的观点。
考官范文开头段
A problem of modern societies is the declining level of health in the general population, with conflicting views on how to tackle this worrying trend. One possible solution is to provide more sports facilities to encourage a more active lifestyle.
学习亮点
高分开头结构:
背景(健康水平下降)+一方立场(提供更多运动设施)
高分句型:
背景句(社会问题),with conflicting views on how to tackle this worrying trend (题目争论)。
仿写
题目:提高化石燃料价格是否是解决环境问题的最好方法
A problem of modern societies is the degradation of environment, with conflicting views on how to tackle this worrying trend. One possible solution is to increase the price of fossil fuels.
考官范文主体1
Advocates of this believe that today’s sedentary lifestyle and stressful working conditions mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time. If there were easy-to-reach local sports centers, we could be more likely to make exercise a regular part of our lives, rather than just collapsing in front of a screen every evening. The variety of sports that could be offered would cater for all ages, levels of fitness and interests: those with painful memories of PE at school might be happier in the swimming pool than on the football pitch.
学习亮点
任务回应:
该段是对题目第一个任务“增加运动设施可改善健康”的回应。
观点论证:背景+条件+结果
高分语言
高分词汇:
sedentary lifestyle 久坐生活方式
stressful working conditions 高压工作环境
easy-to-reach local sport centres 方便到达的运动中心
collapse in front of a screen 北京瘫
cater for all ages 老少咸宜
高分语法:
宾语从句:Advocates of sth believe that +观点
宾语从句:mean that…
虚拟语气:If there were…, sb could…
定语从句:sth that could be offered …
仿写
2019年1月题目:
When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Advocates of the construction of parks and sports facilities believe that the increasingly sedentary lifestyle and stressful working conditions of most city dwellers mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time. If there were easy-to-reach sports facilities and public parks, we could be more likely to spend our leisure time exercising rather than collapsing in front of a screen or staying plugged into our electronic devices(电子设备不离手)
考官范文主体2
However, there may be better ways of tackling this problem. Interest in sport is not universal, and additional facilities might simply attract the already fit, not those who most need them. Physical activity could be encouraged relatively cheaply, for example by installing exercise equipment in parks, as my local council has done. This has the added benefit that parents and children often use them together just for fun, which develops a positive attitude to exercise at an early age.
学习亮点
任务回应:
本段回应了题目中的第二个和第三个任务(little effect)+(other measures)。
连贯衔接:
本段的逻辑在best题型均可参考,即出现best的题型若要反驳,可以从:
1.存在缺点;
2.有更好的方法。
这两个角度进行反驳。
高分语言
高分词汇:
Tackle = deal with 解决
Universal 普遍的
Install exercise equipment 安装运动设备
Develop a positive attitude to sth 培养积极的心态
高分语法:
倒装结构:However, there may be better ways of tackling this problem.
定语从句:those who most need them….
被动语态:Physical activity could be encouraged relatively cheaply…
定语从句:This has the added benefit that parents and children often use them together just for fun, which develops a positive attitude to exercise at an early age.
范文主体3
As well as physical activity, high tax penalties could be imposed on high-fat food products, tobacco and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these contributes to poor health. Even improving public transport would help: it takes longer to walk to the bus stop than to the car.
学习亮点
任务回应:
依旧在回应题目中第三个任务(other measures)
连贯衔接:
本段有两个连接的手段:
1.As well as A, B could… 除了A方法, B方法也可以…
2.Even C would help…甚至采用C也可以...
高分语言
高分词汇:
high tax penalties 高税收
impose 强制实施
excessive consumption 过度消耗
contribute to poor health 有损健康
improve public transport 完善公共交通系统
高分语法:
被动语态:high tax penalties could be imposed…
原因状语从句:…, as excessive consumption… 因为…
引出第二个方法:As well as A, B could
引出第三个方法:Even C would help: +解释
仿写
题目:提高化石燃料价格是否是解决环境问题的最好方法
As well as price increases, more investment could be made in alternative fuels which are more environmentally friendly and could reduce public demand for fossil fuels. Even encouraging telecommute would help: it could reduce the consumption of petrol by allowing employees to avoid daily traffic.
范文结尾段
In my opinion, focusing on sports facilities is too narrow an approach and would not have the desired results. People should be encouraged not only to be more physically active but also adopt a healthier lifestyle in general.
学习亮点
高分结构:
表明立场【不仅仅靠增加设施】+总结观点【多运动+过更健康的生活】
高分语言
Sth is too narrow an approach and would not have the desired results
仅靠做某事不能有预期的效果
be more physically active 多做运动
adopt a healthier lifestyle 过更健康的生活
仿写
题目:提高化石燃料价格是否是解决环境问题的最好方法
In conclusion, focusing on price increases is too narrow an approach and would not have the desired results. Governments should be encouraged not only to invest more in cleaner energy but also implement flextime.
总结
总结来说,想要利用剑桥真题中的范文来提高写作水平,主要学习四个关键点:
1.分析范文如何回应题目中的任务
2.学习观点的论证方法和衔接连段
3.积累句型和高分词汇
4.只学不用假把式(一定要仿写)
最后再强调一遍,千万千万要利用好剑桥真题中的范文!
希望大家都能屠鸭成功!
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